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All You

April 1, 2010

I have to admit I did this poem with such haste, it feels so raw and unpolished. Anyway, I want to post this as my poem for today’s rally. I want to know how people will react to my poems if I write ones that are written in such a hurry. I know this may not be as tasteful as the others I’ve posted in the past, but I still wish you enjoy this. *wink* 🙂

All you could ever want
Is in front of you.
I am anything you want;
I am in front of you

All you could ever need,
I could give to you.
I can give all you need;
I’d give anything for you.

All you could long for
I would give to you only
All you could hope for
You’ll find in me only.

I want to be everything
That you could ever want,
Or possibly ever need,
What you long and hope for.

I will be…..

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27 comments

  1. until of course you lose yourself in their fantasy never really being you, which is the most special thing you can be…i like it raw and uncut…


    • thanks, brian.,.. and welcome back to being online… 🙂


  2. Great uplifting words. Nicely done.
    You’ll find mine here.


    • thanks, anthony… 🙂 ill check it out now… 🙂


  3. I think the “rawness”of this poem makes it expressive and clear. Powerful.


    • thanks, adam… im glad you found it powerful….


  4. raw, exactly how it should be


  5. a lovely poem, nice words of sacrifice and love.


    • thanks, wordwand… glad you liked it… *wink*


  6. Hi Ishabelle
    Sweet poem!!! Thanks for stopping in and leaving me a sweet comment. 😀 Have a really good day 😀
    Luv ya


    • thanks for stopping by too, patty ann… 🙂 i absolutely loved your poem; it was encouraging….


  7. for something rushed I think u did a great job, loved it, good rhythm xx


    • thanks, william… i really appreciate your encouraging comments… 🙂


  8. we always want to to everything everything we have to the ones we love… well written


    • yup… most of the time, we want to be their hero, santa clause, and tooth fairy… hehehe


  9. wonderful promises-lucky recipient.

    loved the intensity of love hidden in every word of the poem.


  10. this one is super smooth and wildly beautiful to me,
    raw is cool,
    magnificent poem!


  11. I love how raw this is! It is so intriguing and the switch from “I am” to “I want to be” is fantastic


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  13. Ishabelle, thanks for visiting and commenting on my blog recently. I’ve been busy with a sick wife. She’s doing much better and I read your beautiful poem to her. She loves it.

    I should be back to blogging regularly shortly and I hope to visit here more often.


    • I am really sorry to hear that your wife is sick. I hope she gets well soon… 🙂 Best of luck to both of you… :0


  14. Great poem.


  15. no offence but this rhymes like a music score- very nice!


  16. hi shabelle,

    i’d like to put notes onto this wonderfully created poem. whaattchaa think? 🙂



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